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This is the final draft of my House On Mango Street essay. My thesis:"Esperanza is a girl who lives in the ghetto but she knows that she is to strong to live on Mango Street forever." I had received a 2 on this assignment due to my lack of structure in this paper that could be improved.I had a well worded prompt but it could be changed and manipulated so that it can be a very strong essay. Revisions brought my essay up from a 1+ to a two do to some changing of the words and sentence. A goal next year for me is to choose my wording more carefully.
This is the final draft of my House On Mango Street essay. My thesis:"Esperanza is a girl who lives in the ghetto but she knows that she is to strong to live on Mango Street forever." I had received a 2 on this assignment due to my lack of structure in this paper that could be improved.I had a well worded prompt but it could be changed and manipulated so that it can be a very strong essay. Revisions brought my essay up from a 1+ to a two do to some changing of the words and sentence. A goal next year for me is to choose my wording more carefully.
Hatchet:This is a final draft of on the book Hatchet by Gary Paulson. My thesis:"Brian will have to use courage and persistence to survive". I had received a 2. I had gotten a 2 because It had looked out of the format that we were given but it had a really good Idea and points that went along with it. Some of the strengths that my essay had was the point that I had tried to make clear and the way that I had worded Brian's(main character) situation. The over all format of my essay could be changed so that it can fit the format properly. A goal that I have for my next formal essay is to pay more attention to certain areas that people feel are mor important in an essay.
Politically powered: I had noticed that my first essay was completely opinionated and had no official format. I had learned how to better word essays and not to keep an essay one sided because people generally do not want to hear one side of a story they would rather hear about the situation. I am proud of my enthusiasm that I was attempting to show towards politics but many people have different Ideas other than my own. Another thing that I am proud of is my attempted form of formatting an essay but in a more creative way.